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Advice? Working on a piece, a friend said “honey” didn’t fit, any suggestions? “ He shoved himself inside her and she bucked against the small kitchen table rocking it. She was warm as honey on a summer day, clenching and smooth all the way around. ” |
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how bout 'freshly laid asphalt' ?
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Your friend is c!ueless. Honey does fit the context of the sentence. To use butter seems too obvious; butter melts in summer. Unless you change it entirely. She felt soft as warm butter on a summer day; yielding and easy her flower spread open. Butter spreads but stick with the honey.
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Why would she be "Warm"? ...Here.. try this; "He backed her up to the kitchen table and shoved himself inside her. She smiled wickedly , this is what she wanted. Her legs wrapped around him, her arms hugged his shoulders, as her hips bucked against him with a quick jackhammer repetition. The small kitchen table sounding each pounding, barely staying together. Her nails bit into his skin, bracing herself , as her pussy griped and lubricating his straining rod with hot oil like fluid as each bucking piston-like stroke pulled him deeper within her."
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3/7/2020 9:53 pm |
I'd love to shove myself deep inside her and you x
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Saludos
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I like Jolie's suggestion.
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Soft, smooth and warm as velvet on a hot summers day ~~ You re welcome...lol
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how bout 'freshly laid asphalt' ?
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3/8/2020 9:03 pm |
Thank you everyone. Jolie, going with what I have... Hammon laughed at asphalt...Jaja also nice suggestion...Heathen you write well,, the scene is already laid out though - great descriptive usage. Thank you for the comments.
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Why have that line at all, who is it intended for 1. A male reader, not interested.....is it a love story or erotica? 2. A female reader might get it, but small audience 3. You, if that's the answer, you should look at it all and ask, who am I writing this for, ME?
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Honey is a good fit...because it makes me think sweet as well....sweet to the taste and warm....so sexy. You could also say warm as fresh apple pie..that might be too funny...lol
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